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There is a little bit more information about Katzenberg's early career in the SaveDisney.com article entitled "The Rise and Fall of Disney Animation in the Modern Era". It's told from an animator's perspective, so there's not much about Katzenberg specifically, but his actions are described in several places. --Ardonik.talk() 23:33, Sep 8, 2004 (UTC)

He was under investigation for campaign finance violations at 14? Really? — Preceding unsigned comment added by 76.167.193.102 (talk) 11:42, February 23, 2007 (UTC)

Political activities request[edit]

Hi editors, for my next request, I'd like to take a look at the opening of the Political activities section.

I see three problems with the opening two paragraphs.

  1. Information related to David Geffen that isn't strictly relevant to Katzenberg and should be removed
  2. There's information that doesn't meet the requirements for direct support in WP:VERIFY (that the $1.5 million raised in 1999 helped Clinton win her seat – while likely true, the source doesn't say this)
  3. The sentence about bringing Obama to Malibu isn't directly supported and isn't particularly relevant, given that the following sentence about Katzenberg offering his full support to an Obama presidential run is the part that truly matters.

I'd propose changing those two paragraphs to a combined paragraph as follows:

Katzenberg has been a longtime prominent supporter of Democratic candidates for elected office and was an early supporter of Barack Obama. Reportedly "smitten" by Obama's speech at the 2004 Democratic National Convention, Katzenberg pledged his full support to Obama in 2006 if he decided to run for president. During his campaign, Obama praised Katzenberg for his "tenacious support and advocacy since we started back in 2007."[1][2]

References

  1. ^ Nicholas, Peter; Orden, Erica (September 30, 2012). "Movie Mogul's Starring Role in Raising Funds for Obama". The Wall Street Journal. Retrieved February 8, 2023.
  2. ^ Haberman, Maggie (May 11, 2012). "The Katzenberg-Obama connection". Politico. Retrieved February 8, 2023.

This cleans up some of the citations and addresses the issues I raised above while summarizing the content and refocusing it on Katzenberg specifically.

Please let me know what you think. Cheers, BINK Robin (talk) 22:03, 4 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@BINK Robin: Do you have a source for the longtime/early part? Based on a quick skim, the WSJ source doesn't explicitly state this anywhere. The rest of the edit is fine. ARandomName123 (talk)Ping me! 23:57, 17 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@ARandomName123:I don't have a specific source for "longtime" but the WSJ source does say that Katzenberg was a supporter of Bill Clinton, so I adjusted some of the wording to give the sentence a more concrete timeline to reflect that.
As for "early", there is a sentence that says Katzenberg, David Geffen, and Steven Spielberg hosted an "early" fundraising dinner for Obama, as well as a sentence stating Katzenberg's support for Obama in 2006. Does that work?
Here's my new suggested wording:
Katzenberg has been a prominent supporter of Democratic candidates for elected office since the Clinton administration and was an early supporter of Barack Obama. Reportedly "smitten" by Obama's speech at the 2004 Democratic National Convention, Katzenberg pledged his full support to Obama in 2006 if he decided to run for president. During his campaign, Obama praised Katzenberg for his "tenacious support and advocacy since we started back in 2007."[1][2]

References

  1. ^ Nicholas, Peter; Orden, Erica (September 30, 2012). "Movie Mogul's Starring Role in Raising Funds for Obama". The Wall Street Journal. Retrieved February 8, 2023.
  2. ^ Haberman, Maggie (May 11, 2012). "The Katzenberg-Obama connection". Politico. Retrieved February 8, 2023.
Quotes from the WSJ supporting Clinton and early:
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  • Mr. Katzenberg retained his interest in politics, backing a variety of Democratic candidates, particularly former President Bill Clinton, one of Mr. Katzenberg's many prominent guests at his 14,000-square-foot ski home in Deer Valley, Utah.
  • Mr. Katzenberg has played a fundraising role ever since Mr. Obama joined the presidential race in 2007—a time when much of Hollywood was loyal to the Clintons. But Mr. Katzenberg and his DreamWorks partners, Steven Spielberg and David Geffen, hosted an early fundraising dinner for Mr. Obama, signaling a shift in Hollywood's allegiance.
  • In 2006, Mr. Spahn brought the junior senator from Illinois in to see Mr. Katzenberg. The mogul pledged his full support if Mr. Obama decided to run, viewing him as the "candidate of change," Mr. Spahn said.
Let me know what you think of the updated wording! Cheers, BINK Robin (talk) 17:06, 18 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done as discussed, with some minor adjustments to refnames. ARandomName123 (talk)Ping me! 19:04, 18 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks! BINK Robin (talk) 19:30, 18 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Political activities request 2[edit]

Hi editors, I have another request for the Political activities section, this time for the second paragraph. This is primarily just some rewording and summarizing of the coverage of the Clooney dinner that I think helps with flow, as well as bringing a sentence up from the third paragraph related to Andy Spahn to better fit the timeline. No sources change, but I did update the citations themselves to make everything consistent. Overall, I think this removes promotional language, fixes some grammar/spelling issues, improves citations and timeline flow, all while maintaining the facts currently present in the article.

Since this is bit tougher to visualize I'll use the TextDiff template:

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Katzenberg has been an avid fund-raiser for Obama, doing so while much of [[Cinema of the United States|Hollywood]] was still supporting the Clintons. His fund-raising prowess has reportedly allowed him to become an "informal liaison" between Hollywood and the White House. Katzenberg co-hosted a fund-raiser for President Obama at the home of actor [[George Clooney]] in May 2012. Katzenberg said that the event raised almost $15 million, which would make it the most profitable presidential fund-raiser in history. It was reported that Obama campaign officials were not happy about some of the requests that Katzenberg had made. In particular, they were bothered that Katzenberg, who reportedly had made himself "indispensable to Obama", required that the President spend time talking at each of the 14 tables.
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Katzenberg was an avid fundraiser for Obama, doing so while much of Hollywood was still supporting [[Hillary Clinton]]. Following Obama's election, Katzenberg's fundraising prowess reportedly allowed him to become an "informal liaison" between Hollywood and the [[White House]]. Katzenberg was reportedly Obama's top "bundler", and, with [[Andy Spahn]], had collected at least $6.6 million in combined donations for both of Obama's presidential campaigns. In 2012, Katzenberg hosted a fundraiser for Obama at the residence of [[George Clooney]] and said the event had raised nearly $15 million, which would make it the most profitable presidential fundraiser in history. Some Obama campaign officials were unhappy with some of Katzenberg's requests, including that Obama stay and talk with guests at each of the 14 tables at the dinner.

Fully rendered, it looks like this:

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Katzenberg was an avid fundraiser for Obama, doing so while much of Hollywood was still supporting Hillary Clinton. Following Obama's election, Katzenberg's fundraising prowess reportedly allowed him to become an "informal liaison" between Hollywood and the White House.[1] Katzenberg was reportedly Obama's top "bundler", and, with Andy Spahn, had collected at least $6.6 million in combined donations for both of Obama's presidential campaigns.[3] In 2012, Katzenberg hosted a fundraiser for Obama at the residence of George Clooney and said the event had raised nearly $15 million, which would make it the most profitable presidential fundraiser in history.[4] Some Obama campaign officials were unhappy with some of Katzenberg's requests, including that Obama stay and talk with guests at each of the 14 tables at the dinner.[1]

References

  1. ^ a b c d e f Cite error: The named reference Raising Funds for Obama was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  2. ^ Kahn, Carrie (11 May 2012). "Head Of Shrek's Studio Puts Millions Behind Obama". NPR.
  3. ^ a b Confessore, Nicholas (September 12, 2012). "Obama Grows More Reliant on Big-Money Contributors". The New York Times. Retrieved February 8, 2023.
  4. ^ a b Kahn, Carrie (May 11, 2012). "Head Of Shrek's Studio Puts Millions Behind Obama". NPR. Retrieved February 8, 2023.
  • Note: Source 1 is the "Raising funds for Obama" WSJ source already used in the live article.

ARandomName123 tagging you here since you've been reviewing my recent requests.

Thanks for taking a look, and please let me know what you think! Cheers, BINK Robin (talk) 15:40, 20 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@BINK Robin: Hi, is there a reason Hillary Clinton is specifically mentioned, instead of the Clintons, as it was before? There also seems to be a some close paraphrasing, so if you could resolve that, that would be great. Everything else seems fine. ARandomName123 (talk)Ping me! 17:11, 27 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@ARandomName123: Hi, good questions. I specified Hillary since she was the one campaigning at the time. However, if you don’t think that is a necessary distinction, I’m happy to leave it as “the Clintons”.
For the close paraphrasing, I can work on making “In 2012, Katzenberg hosted a fundraiser for Obama at the residence of George Clooney and said the event had raised nearly $15 million, which would make it the most profitable presidential fundraiser in history.” more distinct from the source, is there anything else you feel is too close? Cheers! BINK Robin (talk) 18:11, 27 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@BINK Robin: I think it would be best to leave it as "the Clintons," since it probably refers to Bill Clinton as well (hence the plural).
Regarding the close paraphrasing, "Following Obama's election, Katzenberg's fundraising prowess reportedly allowed him to become an "informal liaison" between Hollywood and the White House." is also pretty close to "Mr. Katzenberg's fundraising prowess has earned him access and a role as the informal liaison between Hollywood and the White House". Once this is fixed, feel free to ping me, and it should be good to accept. Thanks! ARandomName123 (talk)Ping me! 19:04, 27 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@ARandomName123: Sounds good! I think adding the WSJ in-text citation should help with WP:CLOP. Here's what I'm thinking, let me know if this works for you. Cheers, BINK Robin (talk) 15:27, 28 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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Katzenberg was an avid fundraiser for Obama, doing so while much of Hollywood was still supporting the Clintons. The Wall Street Journal reported his efforts allowed Katzenberg to become an "informal liaison" between Hollywood and the Obama administration.[1] Katzenberg was reportedly Obama's top "bundler", and, with Andy Spahn, had collected at least $6.6 million in combined donations for both of Obama's presidential campaigns.[2] In 2012, Katzenberg organized a fundraiser for Obama's 2012 presidential campaign at the residence of George Clooney. The event reportedly set a record for presidential fundraisers, garnering approximately $15 million.[3] Some Obama campaign officials were unhappy with some of Katzenberg's requests, including that Obama stay and talk with guests at each of the 14 tables at the dinner.[1]

References

  1. ^ a b Cite error: The named reference Raising Funds for Obama was invoked but never defined (see the help page).
  2. ^ Confessore, Nicholas (September 12, 2012). "Obama Grows More Reliant on Big-Money Contributors". The New York Times. Retrieved February 8, 2023.
  3. ^ Kahn, Carrie (May 11, 2012). "Head Of Shrek's Studio Puts Millions Behind Obama". NPR. Retrieved February 8, 2023.
 Done . Looks better now, thanks. ARandomName123 (talk)Ping me! 15:34, 28 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks! BINK Robin (talk) 15:42, 28 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Political activities request 3[edit]

Hi editors, for my next request in Political activities I'd like to ask for some small changes to the third-to-last paragraph. Like my last request, I'll use TextDiff to highlight the differences. Essentially, this request is just to summarize the text a bit, smooth out some biased language (e.g. "deep-pocketed"), cleans up some references and replaces a dead link. Please let me know what you think. Cheers, BINK Robin (talk) 15:26, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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It was reported that Obama arrived in Los Angeles on October 7, 2012, where he joined [[Bill Clinton]] at Katzenberg's Beverly Hills home for a private meeting with several deep-pocketed Democratic donors. Obama's campaign indicated the meeting was to thank supporters, but some members of the campaign finance committee said that it involved the pro-Obama PAC [[Priorities USA Action]]. Members of the White House press corps who had traveled to California with Obama were kept in the garage of Katzenberg's mansion and one reporter called the meeting "unusual". Katzenberg, who had previously donated $2 million to the pro-Obama PAC Priorities USA Action, donated an additional $1 million in October 2012. He donated $1 million to the Super PAC Priorities USA, which supported [[Hillary Clinton]] in the 2016 presidential race. In October 2016, he hosted a $100,000-per-person fund-raiser at his Beverly Hills residence with President [[Barack Obama]] as the main attraction.
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In October 2012, Obama and Bill Clinton reportedly visited Katzenberg at his home in [[Beverly Hills]] for a private meeting with wealthy Democratic donors. The Obama campaign said the meeting was to thank supporters, but some members of the campaign finance committee said that it involved the pro-Obama [[political action committee]] [[Priorities USA Action]]. Members of the [[White House press corps]] who had traveled to California with Obama were kept in the garage of Katzenberg's mansion and one reporter called the meeting "unusual". Katzenberg, who had previously donated $2 million to Priorities USA Action, donated an additional $1 million to the PAC that month. Kaztzenberg donated $1 million to Priorities USA Action in 2015, which supported [[Hillary Clinton]] in the 2016 presidential race. In October 2016, he hosted a $100,000-per-person fundraiser at his Beverly Hills residence with President [[Barack Obama]] as the main attraction.

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In October 2012, Obama and Bill Clinton reportedly visited Katzenberg at his home in Beverly Hills for a private meeting with wealthy Democratic donors. The Obama campaign said the meeting was to thank supporters, but some members of the campaign finance committee said that it involved the pro-Obama political action committee Priorities USA Action. Members of the White House press corps who had traveled to California with Obama were kept in the garage of Katzenberg's mansion and one reporter called the meeting "unusual".[5] Katzenberg, who had previously donated $2 million to Priorities USA Action, donated an additional $1 million to the PAC that month.[5][6] Kaztzenberg donated $1 million to Priorities USA Action in 2015, which supported Hillary Clinton in the 2016 presidential race.[7] In October 2016, he hosted a $100,000-per-person fundraiser at his Beverly Hills residence with Obama as the main attraction.[8]

References

  1. ^ Daunt, Tina (7 October 2012). "Obama, Clinton Powwow with Donors at Jeffrey Katzenberg's House". The Hollywood Reporter.
  2. ^ "Steven Spielberg, Jeffrey Katzenberg Give $1 Million Each to Aid Obama Super PAC". Huffington Post. 21 October 2012.
  3. ^ "The Top Donors Backing Hillary Clinton's Super PAC". Forbes. May 27, 2016.
  4. ^ "Traffic Alert: Obama To Visit Beverly Hills Today". The Beverly Hills Courier. October 24, 2016. Archived from the original on October 25, 2016. Retrieved October 24, 2016.
  5. ^ a b c d Daunt, Tina (October 7, 2012). "Obama, Clinton Powwow with Donors at Jeffrey Katzenberg's House". The Hollywood Reporter. Retrieved February 3, 2023.
  6. ^ a b "Steven Spielberg, Jeffrey Katzenberg Give $1 Million Each to Aid Obama Super PAC". Huffington Post. October 21, 2012. Retrieved February 8, 2023.
  7. ^ a b Faughnder, Ryan (April 28, 2016). "Katzenberg to relinquish DreamWorks Animation CEO role after Comcast deal". Los Angeles Times. Retrieved February 13, 2023.
  8. ^ a b Gardner, Chris (October 24, 2016). "Inside Jeffrey Katzenberg's Final Fundraiser for President Obama". The Hollywood Reporter. Retrieved February 13, 2023.
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