The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by SandyGeorgia 22:13, 25 January 2010 [1].

Supernatural (season 2)[edit]

Nominator(s): Ωphois 16:08, 22 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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I am nominating this for featured article because three different copy-edits have been done since previous nomination (by myself, Airplaneman, and ATC), and I feel everything is up to FA standards. Ωphois 16:08, 22 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

  • In the lead, the info about the change to The CW could be improved a bit. Explain how it used to be on the WB.
Changed to: 'It was the first season to air on the CW television network, a joint venture of The WB and UPN; the previous was broadcast on The WB." Ωphois 18:22, 22 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the description for "Playthings," move the actress who plays Maggie up to after the character's first mention
Done. Ωphois 18:22, 22 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Also in "Writing:" "Some storylines originated from ideas that writers could not[...]" -> "[...]ideas that the writers[...]"
Done. Ωphois 18:22, 22 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • In "Reception:" "He also found "Nightshifter" to the "best action[...]"" -. "to be the "best action[...]""
Done. Ωphois 18:22, 22 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
The Flash {talk} 17:58, 22 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Nice little article.

"and attempt to discover what the demon's plan is for Sam and other psychic children like him." - Maybe "and attempt to discover the demon's plan for Sam and other psychic children like him."

Done. Ωphois 20:26, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The word "season" is used 3, 3, and 2 times in the fist three paragraphs. A bit too much. "Casting" is 3, 6, 2. "Writing" uses the word a ton early on. "Reception" is 4, 8, 1. "DVD Release" has 7 of them.

I'll work on the production and reception section. I managed to remove one from the lead, but their is no other word I know of that is synonymous with "season", so I can't think of any other way of phrasing it in the lead. Ωphois 20:28, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Same with the other sections. "Season" is mainly used as an adjective, so I don't know of any other way of having it. Ωphois 20:31, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"It averaged about 3.14 million American viewers, and was in danger of being canceled." - This isn't clear to me. Was it going to be not renewed? Canceled half way through?

Changed to "in danger of not being renewed". Ωphois 20:26, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"The cast and crew gained many award nominations" - "gained" is awkward.

Changed to: "The cast and crew received many award nominations, but the season garnered mixed reviews from critics." Ωphois 20:26, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"While both the brotherly chemistry between the lead actors and the decision to finish the main storyline at the season's end were praised, the formulaic structure of the episodes was criticized." - Was this by the critics? If so, say that. - Peregrine Fisher (talk) (contribs) 20:09, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The previous sentence notes the mixed reviews from critics, so to me it would seem repetitive. Ωphois 20:26, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"In exchange for saving Dean's life, he will give up his own life, his immortal soul, and the mystical Colt." - Might be good to say what the mystical Colt is.

Done. Ωphois 22:01, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"As the genius Ash (Chad Lindberg) attempts to analyze John's research on Azazel with his computer" - Maybe "As the bar's resident genius Ash (Chad Lindberg) attempts to analyze John's research on Azazel with his computer"

Done. Ωphois 22:01, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"Dean later takes out his anger over his father's death on the Impala. " - Might be good to explain what the Impala is.

Wikilinked to it's entry on main page. Is that okay? Ωphois 22:01, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"was executed and buried on the location where the apartment building was later built." - "at the location" maybe? Not sure.

I think "on" works better. Ωphois 22:01, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"This makes Sam realize that the woman's spirit" - "Sam realizes that the woman's spirit"

Done. Ωphois 22:01, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

You might want to remove the word "actually" in episodes 7 and 8. - Peregrine Fisher (talk) (contribs) 20:36, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Removed from episode 8, but I think it works better with it in episode 7. Ωphois 22:01, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"leading Sam to believe his father's belief of Croatoan being a demonic plague." - Maybe "father's theory"

Done. Ωphois 22:05, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"it contacts someone to inform him that Sam was immune to the virus. " - Maybe "is immune"

Done. Ωphois 22:05, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"a single mother, who plans to sell it." - Not sure the commas is needed.

Done. Ωphois 22:05, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"and a metal pipe on the truck falls and impales him to death," - "to death" probably not needed.

Done. Ωphois 22:05, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"He then visits Jo at her job and begins sadistically toying with her head," - Sounds like her head is not attached to her body. Maybe "playing mind games" or something.

Done. Ωphois 22:05, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"Sam shoots Dean and flees to Bobby." - "flees to Bobby's" maybe. Also, should say who Bobby is, since it's the first mention. (Who Bobby is is in the next episode)

Done. Ωphois 22:05, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"and Bobby learns that the demon used a binding ritual to bind itself into Sam's body" - "and Bobby learns that the demon used a binding ritual to bind itself to Sam's body"

Done. Ωphois 22:05, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"it reveals that it is the same demon which formerly resided within Meg Masters." - First mentino of Meg. Might want to say who she is. - Peregrine Fisher (talk) (contribs) 20:49, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Would a wikilink work? Meg herself is just a shell until the fourth season, so explaining who she is wouldn't really work IMO. Ωphois 22:11, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

They salt and burn several bodies. You might want to explain why in the first instance. They also use salt as protection several times. Might want to explain that as well. - Peregrine Fisher (talk) (contribs) 20:55, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I added in the first instance that salt is a deterrent of ghosts, so I think that also covers the "salt and burn" instances since they involve ghosts. Ωphois 22:14, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

ADR (Automated dialogue replacement) should be fully spelled out, I think.

Since it's wiki-linked, I personally don't think it's necessary. Ωphois 22:11, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

It is hard to find another word for "season". Sometimes you can use "it". "When production of the second season started, Kripke wanted to avoid the monster-of-the-week formula used in the first season." could use "the previous year" for the second instance. - Peregrine Fisher (talk) (contribs) 21:13, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I made these changes. Ωphois 22:18, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

ADR should be spelled out per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (abbreviations)

Done. Ωphois 01:52, 27 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"but decided against it because he did not have knowledge of production details." - Maybe "but decided against it because he did not have production knowledge."

Done. Ωphois 01:52, 27 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"and decided to have production look like "goofballs"" - "the production"? What is goofballs? The production crew look like goofballs?

Changed to "the production staff" Ωphois 01:52, 27 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"The plot, which apparently "fell into place" during the writing process, " - Why was it "apparently"?

Removed it. Ωphois 01:52, 27 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"hallucinates that she is mental patient" - "a mental"?

Done. Ωphois 01:52, 27 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"the writers would have to devise a way for Sam and Dean to escape in the end." - "the writers had to devise a way for Sam and Dean to escape in the end."?

That element was changed during development, so the writers never had to devise it. Ωphois 01:52, 27 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

" which Kripke feels ended up improving the episode" - "felt"? - Peregrine Fisher (talk) (contribs) 22:50, 26 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Ωphois 01:52, 27 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Support - Nice article. - Peregrine Fisher (talk) (contribs) 17:40, 28 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose for image concerns (criteria 3):

Data of "free" image is non-verifiable (WP:IUP#Requirements), one non-free image seems to be untenable with NFCC, and one could do with improvement. Jappalang (talk) 03:09, 27 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose for now by Karanacs. Overall, I found this an engaging and well-written article, but there were some areas that I got completely bogged down in. I've never seen this show, and I haven't read anything else about it. The article body opens with the episode list, and I was totally confused. I highly recommend a background or overview section that would summarize the first season very briefly.

Karanacs (talk) 18:27, 29 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Neutral. Excellent work on making the episode list more accessible! I was interested enough to read the summaries of the other seasons and may actually start watching this now. I unfortunately don't have the time to review the Writing section right now, but I would not have opposed on that basis alone. Karanacs (talk) 20:33, 7 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose On sources What makes these reliable?

I'm not impressed with some of these pop articles that come at FAC with sources like these. Do people know that trade publications (or even a basic Google Archive search) exist?

RB88 (T) 15:52, 31 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Strong oppose. Underwhelmed; one of the weakest FACs over recent months if it's promoted. But I won't stand in the way.

I haven't gone further. The start suggests that the whole thing needs an independent copy-edit. Tony (talk) 23:01, 16 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

PS "the writers desired to flesh out the concept of hunters." ... Plain English, please. Tony (talk) 23:02, 16 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Spot check:

Probably remove comma for a smoother read.

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